First draft of Moonrise Ink complete!

A couple days ago, I finally finished the first draft of my novel, Moonrise Ink! The first draft clocks in at 105,365 words. Of course, that wordcount will probably decrease as I work on a second draft. 105K words is a bit long for a middle-grade fantasy. Still, I don’t want to chop words for the mere sake of a shorter wordcount; it’s all about what the story needs.

So I’ll soon be working on a second draft. For now, though, I’m taking some time away from reading my own writing so I can see it with fresh eyes in a few weeks or so. In the meantime, I’m beginning to research the market, possible agents to query, and working on coming up with the best query letter I can.

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The “I’m Spartacus!” moment

Writer David Brin has an interesting article on Locus Online about “why films and novels routinely depict society and its citizens as fools.” He points out how a lot of stories pit the main character against society, often unrealistically. Yet we, the collective audience, who make up that society in the real world, are meant to empathize with the hero, not the dumb society. After all, who doesn’t go around thinking in his head that his own life philosophy is the objectively best one? No one goes around thinking he’s morally wrong in his philosophical beliefs, at least not while keeping sane. So it’s easy to naturally vilify the rest of the dumb world that just doesn’t (or refuses to) see and understand all the obvious truths you see so clearly.

Of course, there are plenty of stories in which worldly rejection is established as a character flaw to be overcome. For example, in the animated film Shrek, our ogre hero says something like: “It’s the world that seems to have a problem with me! They take one look at me and say, ‘Ah! Help! Run! A big stupid ugly ogre!’ They judge me before they even know me.” Or Jean Valjean of the Les Misérables musical and recent film, who sings: “For I had come to hate the world, this world that always hated me.” The point of this sort of conflict isn’t so much that the rest of society is truly evil and stupid, but that the main character’s attitude toward the world needs to change, regardless of whatever the world did to help instill that attitude.

What caught my attention in Brin’s article was what he mentions of the Spider-Man films:

One of my favorite recent exceptions is the series of four Spiderman flicks. None of them are highbrow or classy. But despite their clichéd fluffiness, there appears to be a little-noticed tradition. In all of the first three films, Spiderman repeatedly saves New Yorkers from harm. But there is always a moment of brief role-reversal… when normal people, regular New Yorkers, step up and save Spiderman. Indeed, when I watched the recent fourth one – the reboot – I had to start by quashing sadness over Hollywood’s craven inability to ever try anything new. Still, there came a moment, near the end, when – once again and with style — citizens stood up again for their hero. And I felt a thrill.

I felt proud.

How do such unpoisonous moments manage to sneak in, despite the driving needs of jeopardy pacing?

A moment like this came in a 2009 animated film I recently watched called Summer Wars. Near the end, one of the main characters finds herself unable to defeat a villain because her virtual account has run out of resources. She’s at a brick wall. Who should come to her rescue but countless other online players, willing to give her their accounts so that she can defeat the villain. (And the better the accompanying film music, the more this moment can be milked for its dramatic power. Summer Wars features a heavenly choir swelling at this moment.)

Or there’s the more quotable moment in the 1960 epic Kubrick film Spartacus. Wanted by the authorities, a soldier asks a defeated group of slaves which one of them is Spartacus. He must be crucified for his crime of a leading a slave rebellion. All the slaves come to Spartacus’s defense. “I’m Spartacus!” they all say, each willing to share in their leader’s fate.

It is the complete opposite of feeling rejected. Not only is it support for the main character as a person, it’s support for what the main character is fighting for. No one says, “I’m more capable of being the hero here, stand aside and let me take over.” But it’s not so much that the hero maintains his status and receives personal validation, but that what the hero is fighting for is proved to be something bigger than the hero himself. The hero does get to maintain his status, not because of who he is, but because of what he represents in the story. What he’s fighting for is something that affects everybody.

In this way, the main character’s connectedness to society is emphasized. Not only is his goal something bigger than himself, but he himself is part of something bigger than himself: society as a unity, not a bunch of a competing individuals. Note, this is not collectivism as opposed to individualism; rather it’s the marriage of both. Society is made of each individual, so each individual adds to the whole. Each individual is just as important as the whole, and vice versa. They make each other. They are separate, but they are part of each other.

Like love, and as an element of love, every human instinctively understands this. Perhaps not necessarily as a philosophical concept (collectivism vs. individualism and selflessness vs. selfishness are incomplete understandings), but as an instinctual desire, something that will satisfy the human soul because it is what the human soul is made of.

And stories are great at giving humans glimpses of this.

A variation on this sort of moment is when a supporting character comes to the hero’s aid in the battle’s final moments. It might be the return of the rogue, such as Han Solo of Star Wars flying into battle to help the rebels’ assault on the Death Star. Or it might be the ever-reliable Samwise Gamgee of The Lord of the Rings: The Return of the King proclaiming: “I can’t carry it for you, but I can carry you!” Our hero rises with the aid of a supporting character. Again, it’s a powerful moment for the same sorts of reasons.

Appendum: The “Rescue the Hero” moment

Now that I think more about it, I’d call the “I’m Spartacus” moment a type of more general “Rescue the Hero” moment.

The “Rescue the Hero” moment may happen shortly before the climax, as one or more supporting characters aid the hero in getting to the climax. Examples include Samwise Gamgee in The Lord of the Rings: The Return of the King, or Gonji in Yojimbo.

It may happen as part of the climax (especially when the main character is not the protoganist), as in the bike flying of E.T. in E.T. the Extra-Terrestrial, or the sacrifice of the giant in Iron Giant, or the entrance of T-Rex in Jurassic Park.

It may happen right after the climax, to save the hero from his own self-sacrifice. Examples include Dr. Jones Sr. holding Indiana over an abyss in Indiana Jones and the Last Crusade, or the mentos mountain rescue of Vanellope von Schweetz in Wreck-It Ralph. Or, again, Samwise Gamgee in The Lord of the Rings: The Return of the King. And again with the eagles in the same film, lifting the hobbits to safety.

Finally, it may happen as icing on the cake as a “Thank the Hero” moment, when the climax is over. Examples include Chief Bromden’s tragic “rescue” in One Flew Over the Cuckoo’s Nest, the bowing to the hobbits in The Lord of the Rings: The Return of the King, the money donations to George Baily in It’s a Wonderful Life, or the medal ceremony in Star Wars.

Whenever a crowd gives the character support instead of just one supporting character, I’d call it an “I’m Spartacus!” moment, a crowd variation on a “Rescue the Hero” or a “Thank the Hero” moment.

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First novel progress update

Just a quick update. Progress slowly continues on my upper-middle-grade fantasy novel attempt, Moonrise Ink, my first thus-far-successful attempt at writing something of this length. Almost to the end. I’m still slogging through the climax scene. But it’s like Zeno’s paradox; the closer I get to the climax moment of the climax scene, the slower I seem to write. It’s as if I want to be more and more careful about everything, and obsess over every detail. A reader will probably read over several hour’s worth of work in less than a minute. That is, my extra effort will probably go unnoticed.

And, I confess, I feel apprehensive about something, though I’m not sure what. Perhaps I shouldn’t even try to guess, but I think it’s the insecurity of imagining no agents or publishers ever being interested in this work, and feeling like all the time and effort put into this thing will come to nothing. Which I rationally realize is ridiculous. Odds are rarely in favor of a first novel being professionally published, and the middle-grade fantasy market is crowded. And, anyway, I’ve learned a lot about writing in the process. Looking back to the novel’s first chapters, which I wrote about a year and a half ago (and which will certainly need plenty of editing), I feel my writing has definitely improved. The novel is already a success in that regard. Still, the fear eats at me every now and then.

But my emotions also swing the other way, when I’m not thinking about craft technicalities or career dreams, when I’m just thinking about the world and the characters and the story. I get goosebumps and feel all epic. What writer doesn’t? It’s the call that lures any storyteller.

Anyway, only a few parts left to write of the climax, then three or four short scenes to wrap things up. I wish I could say I’d be done by the end of the week, but at my current rate, who knows. One word at a time.

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Intruder words

Writer Bryan Thomas Schmidt recently made a nice post about using “intruder words” in writing. I had never heard the phrase before, but I think I understand what they are. As Schmidt says:

‘Wondered, felt, thought, saw, knew, heard,’ etc. are all ‘intruder’ words. They intrude on the action, by stating extemporaneously what can be written more actively. They pull us out of the intimate POV of the character and throw things into telling or passiveness.

When we experience everyday life, we don’t consciously think about the mechanics of our own perceptions. Our focus is on our experiences themselves. So when we want to make the reader experience a story from a character’s POV, reminding the reader of those mechanics tends weaken the illusion (unless, I suppose, the character is consciously thinking about those mechanics himself).

Looking back through my novel-in-progress, I use “intruder words” a lot. I am guilty, guilty, guilty. “Thravien jumped when he noticed the silhouette of a man…” “Thravien heard his heart beating.” “Quoll heard nothing but gushing water.” “Thravien didn’t see Sinta’s ship…” “Thravien watched the ships…” It is definitely something I will have to keep in mind as I finish writing a first draft and begin a second draft. So many of my sentences can be reworded to put the reader deeper into the characters’ experiences.

This might be a topic for another post, but I wonder if this might be why reading about glances and glares annoys me as a reader. “He gave her an amused glance.” “She returned an annoyed glance.” “They shared a thoughtful glance.” Bleh! If I am called to imagine the look of a glance, then I have to step outside the character and watch him like a camera-man. It takes me out of the experience of being that character. And my imagination can choose the appropriate look of a glance quite well on its own, thank you very much.

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The villain

In the real world, although we humans can have strong and passionate disagreements, I can’t imagine that anyone really thinks of themselves as the villain, purposefully setting out to get in some hero’s way. Rather, villains are just doing what they honestly think is right. If their conscience annoys them, they don’t think about it, or rationalize it away.

This is why villain monologues also seem unrealistic to me. They come from thinking of a story only through the hero’s point of view. “The poor hero is being persecuted! It’s all the villain’s fault! He’s just so hateful!” What about the villain’s point of view? Can’t he be just as passionate about something as the hero? I don’t mean a story should be morally ambiguous. I mean that a villain should be just as human as the hero, and his motivations should be sympathetic, even if we as an audience disagree with his ultimate choices. That is, even if we disagree with his decisions, we should understand where he’s coming from. In this way, a monologue at a story’s climax should not be necessary; his motivations should be apparent from the story.

But there is a time when I think something like a monologue can work. A monologue is meant for exposition, so that we as an audience can understand what and why a villain did what he did. And while a monologue itself is unrealistic, it is conceivable that a hero may, during a conversation, coax a villain into revealing his motivations. This can only happen believably if the villain thinks the hero may be sympathetic to his views. For example, the villain may be trying to lure the hero into joining him. Or perhaps he just wants sympathy and validation. (I recall Stinky Pete’s exposition in Toy Story 2, or Darth Vader’s classic confession in Star Wars: The Empire Strikes Back.) Such a conversation, when the villain is trying to get something out of his exposition, should seem more natural than a direct gloating monologue spoken only for the sake of exposition.

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RIP Duotrope

Duotrope.com is a free resource which lists writing markets. That is, if you have a piece of short fiction or non-fiction that you’d like to get published, Duotrope is an excellent resource for finding a potential publisher for your work. Users are also able to keep track of their submissions. This is handy if you are submitting multiple pieces to multiple markets. Duotrope also keeps lots of submissions statistics.

Unfortunately Duotrope announced today that, as of January 1st 2013, they will no longer be free. They plan on charging users $5 a month or $50 a year to use their service.

I can’t analyze this issue from Duotrope’s point of view. I don’t know how much their hosting costs are, who’s doing all the coding, how much work goes into their updating, etc. So if the site’s current donation business model is not maintainable, I can’t argue with that.

From a writer’s perspective, however, I am called to ask myself: Do I get enough out of this resource to justify paying $5 a month or $50 a year for it?

Answer: No.

I mainly use Duotrope for finding speculative fiction markets. Before discovering Duotrope, I used Ralan.com for this. It’s not nearly as professional looking as Duotrope, but it’s kept well maintained and up-to-date.

Duotrope has a handy search feature. Useful, but not worth paying for. I can search through Ralan.com’s listing on my own.

Before I discovered Duotrope, I tracked my own submissions in a spreadsheet. Easy stuff. I don’t need to pay for an automated system to do that.

Duotrope lists some handy response statistics, including how many submissions were pending for a certain market, an acceptance ratio, and average response times. Interesting stats, but do I really need them? No. (After submitting to various markets for a few years, you naturally get a feel for who’s fast and who’s slow on your own anyway.)

Some writers on Facebook have argued, “Well, if you’re a serious writer, this is the cost of doing business.” I reject the notion that willingness to shell out money for resources of convenience determines whether or not you’re serious. Any writer who mentions seriousness with this issue is a snob. All writers who use Duotrope are serious.

So, like many other writers out there, I’ll most likely be returning to Ralan.com for my sff market listing needs.

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Moonrise Ink novel progress

My progress on Moonrise Ink has been continuing slowly. The book is now at 71,138 words, and I’ve got about 7 scenes left to write. It’s nice to be able to see the light at the end of the tunnel. I’ve never finished writing something of this length before. Still, there will be a ton of editing and polishing left to do. Anyway, I’m hoping I can finish this first draft before the end of this month, as I’d really like to try NaNoWriMo for a fourth time next month.

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Before you write

There are some things every writer should do before sitting down to write. These preparations will ensure that writing time goes smoothly and is a fun experience. Here is what I call the “Essential Writer Checklist”:

1) Get some sleep. You can’t write if you’re tired. If you do, you’ll make a bunch of mistakes and only waste time. If you have to take a nap in the middle of the day, do it.
2) Eat something. If it’s morning, eat breakfast, of course. Mid-morning? Get a snack or a drink. You don’t want to find yourself hungry in the middle of writing.
3) Make sure all house chores are done. You can’t write if chores are haunting the back of your mind.
4) Watch a movie. This will help give you some good story ideas, and inspire you with dreams of your novel getting turned into a movie. Most writers skip this step, and this is why so many books aren’t that good nowadays.
5) Browse the web. It’s important to be up-to-date on the latest book news, and you don’t want to miss any writing tips a blog or a forum post may contain.
6) Listen to some music. Music affects human emotions more directly than any other art. There is simply no excuse for not getting into the writing mood by listening to some good music for an hour or so before you begin.
7) Read back over everything you wrote and make sure it’s good. It’s a waste of time to continue writing something if it just has a bunch of mistakes.
8) Update Twitter and Facebook to let everyone know that you are now writing. This will help build your reputation as a writer, and thus build your self-esteem, and thus help your writing.

Remember, this checklist must be repeated every day you want to write. If you skip anything, your writing will suffer and you will never succeed.

If you don’t complete the checklist, don’t worry. There’s always tomorrow.

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Putting the movie in the mind onto the page

I’ve heard quite a few writers talk about how they can see their story in their mind like a movie, but they get frustrated that they can’t seem to capture it in words.

To which I reply:

Well, of course you can’t. If writing could communicate images as easily as actual images, the film industry wouldn’t exist.

You shouldn’t be trying to capture images with your writing, you should be trying to convey emotions. Let the readers create their own images; give their imaginations some credit!

I’m not saying you should never describe anything visual. Of course you must do that. I’m saying that the point of your descriptions should not be to share the “movie in your mind” or the “picture in your head.” It should be to convey an emotion (usually the emotion of the POV character at that time) through the description, both in its wording and in what you choose to include in it.

The reader is never going to see that brilliant image in your mind, but if you can convey a powerful emotion with your words, you can trust that his imagination will be perfectly capable of filling in the details and coming up with something that will work better for him than anything you could describe.

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Not Just Rockets and Robots

My short story Maker of the Twenty-first Moon appears in Not Just Rockets and Robots: Daily Science Fiction Year One. Daily Science Fiction publishes a story every weekday, and this book collects all the stories from their entire first year.

The resulting book is 871 pages of science fiction, fantasy, slipstream; 260 or so stories to entertain and possibly even make you think. At more than 425,000 words, it’s more than 4 good-sized novels worth of fiction.

I got my copy last week. It’s wonderful for someone like me who prefers to read on paper.

Nice!

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